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Liselle Moncherie



Saturday, February 25, 2012 @ 5:01 PM  |  27 Comment(s)



Cudi was confused; she could not believe the sheriff’s words. Barry has been with her every morning ,and always there to catch her when she falls riding Vigdis. She hold her tears until the sheriff drove off from the bridge.Her tears fall on her bicycle seat,Cudi took a long stare at Vigdis,she knew that she must seek the truth,is the Barry that she met is the real Barry Deaver or just a stranger  who claimed himself as Barry,by using Barry Deaver’s identity? .She puts her legs on the paddle and start cycling to the town’s public library .She never cycle Vigdis as fast the wind before but this time,they both were breaking the wind .Her heart was thumping wildly,she’s afraid that she might be losing her mind to believe that Barry is ever existed.

“Excuse me.I need to find an information about….a suicide case that happened 2 years ago at the bridge .Can you help me?” Cudi asked the librarian politely.

“Oh,yes I can help you with that,there’s an article about Barry Deaver.He jumped off the bridge with his bicycle.The article is in the library archives.Let me get it for you.”The librarian tried to assist Cudi

SATURDAY- A 23 year old “Lover Boy” was found dead at the Swanwick Lake .The sheriff concluded that it was a suicide after they found a suicide note handwritten by the victim,Barry Joseph Deaver.His body was found  fully dressed and the Sheriff Department also found a yellow bicycle, they believe that it belongs to the victim.The victim’s father Gary John Deaver  was frustrated with his son’s death.”He’s my only son…I’ve lost everything”said Barry’s father after the press interviewed him at his residence.The funeral will be held on Tuesday at Serenity Soul Cemetery.
-source Gibson

There’s a picture of Barry in the newspaper article,wearing a plaid shirt just like he used to wear everyday when he meets Cudi.The sheriff’s words were right,Barry was dead.The guy whom she met is the real Barry,not a stranger who regarded himself as Barry like Cudi expected to be.He is real and used to exist in this world but now he’s gone.He is not an imagination.Cudi left the library after she learns the truth that Barry is gone.

She cycled to every place that she used to practice with Barry.The foxtail field and the the abandoned Peabody’s farm.She went back to the bench where Barry likes to sit near the bridge.Cudi climbed the bridge’s beam just like she did on the first day she met Barry.

“Barry! Save me! I want to commit a suicide now,hurry before I jump!”Cudi screamed  until the top of her lungs.She was hoping that Barry would stop her,just like before.This time,no one tries to stop her,Barry wasn’t there anymore.Cudi returned to her cabin late that evening.Terri was very worried because Cudi promised to return in the afternoon.Cudi locked herself in her room,she continues to write about “Bruce” and “Laura”.On the 50th page and she changed the ending…

“Laura was surprised after seeing Bruce wearing a white tuxedo that morning,unlike every day,he used to wear the same clothes but on that day he decidde to propose Laura to be his one true love.Laura said yes and they  tie a knot a week after.That’s the story of a lady from the big apple marries a stranger who eventually becomes her husband.The guy from the orange county.If it’s not because of the bicyle and Laura’s weakness,they might not be together or remain being strangers like before."

Cudi finally finished her novel.500 pages of recorded moments of Barry and herself. Terri was still working on typing the last chapter.It is the time that they have to get back to New York,the big apple city that doesn’t grows apples.Cudi packed her things after Terri finished  her typing work.She puts Barry’s button in her purse,the button that holds many memories and also mysteries.A pick-up service was called to bring Vigdis and their baggage back to New York.

Before the pick- up service arrives,Cudi took one last cycle with Vigdis on the orange county ground.A handwritten novel was in her wicker basket,she wanted to give the original novel to Barry’s father.Cudi went to Deaver’s Bicycle Store,and meets Gary Deaver.

“I would like you to have this,Barry’s last words was in this novel.I want you to keep it,Barry wished that he could talk to you but..he couldn’t .He loves you Mr Deaver and I know you do too .Goodbye .” said Cudi.She continues her last trip to Serenity Soul Cemetery,where Barry’s body were buried.

“Barry Joseph Deaver”
1987-2010
“Thank you Barry for everything”
There are words that we can derived from Bicycle
By
Bye
Bile
Cycle

But only 2 words that  are needed in this story Bye and Cycle.Life is a cycle,sometimes we say HI and sometimes we have to say BYE.
~The End~


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Blogger Unknown SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 5:18 PM  

nice ending.just a fine way to wrap it all up.

get it read by your mum,or whoever else to edit them,print a few copies and send to the people that "matters". and ur on ur way to stardom!hoho XD


Blogger Noorieda SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 6:03 PM  

Your mom is a writer? wow..

Happy ending? hehehe


Blogger Liselle MonCherie SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 6:06 PM  

Ehh bukan2 silap XD.
My mom is not a writer,tp dye jumpa org yg boleh edit cerita ni XD.Org tu
writer . hhehe.My mom is a teacher XD


Blogger Liselle MonCherie SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 6:07 PM  

@Clive My mom found a writer who can edit this story! :D


Blogger Noorieda SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 6:22 PM  

Owhh..wah...Firzanah, boleh saya nak cerita awak ni??


Blogger Liselle MonCherie SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 6:25 PM  

Sebenarnya ni stereotype yg belum di-edit.byk kesalahan XDD aaa malu. lpas sy edit bru sy email awak :)


Blogger whitecappuccino SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 6:51 PM  

like the ending and the story too..good work! keep on writing k!


Blogger Liselle MonCherie SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 7:01 PM  

Yay thanks so much! :D heee :3
Terharu :')


Blogger Ayuni SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 7:04 PM  

hm, the ending is something....


Blogger Lysa SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 7:31 PM  

Finally, my guess was right !! Im so excited. haha :p

Do another story please? :(


Blogger Shafiq SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 7:35 PM  

A bit twist but It is a good story. :-)


Blogger Liselle MonCherie SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 8:07 PM  

@Ayuni=Something? hehehe XD


Blogger Liselle MonCherie SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 8:09 PM  

@Lisa= yes,haha.Do another story?
Hmm maybe when I got things to write
ehehehe XD


Blogger Liselle MonCherie SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 8:10 PM  

@Shafiq : My head can't think relevantly sometimes so there
are some twisting parts hehe.
Thanks for reading :D


Blogger Zehan Ilyana SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 8:58 PM  

i dont know why, i feel sad to read the ending.
berair mata ni kot..huhu.

i love this story very much, liselle.
touched my heart.

cudi ni macam the person yang akan sampaikan last words barry kat ayah dia..
and she succeeded...:')


Blogger Miss Purple SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 9:46 PM  

nice ending, so meaningful, means that we need to treasure our life, never give up just because a small matter, right? =)

i wish you'll write another story..=D

good luck and keep on writing! may you become a real novelist someday! =D...go go liselle!!


Blogger Liselle MonCherie SAID ON February 25, 2012 at 10:40 PM  

Wow,thx so much you guys waaah terharu!! Thanks for wishing me and
give me the strength to continue writing! yeah!! I stayed up for 3 night for this :) hehehe


Blogger F. SAID ON February 26, 2012 at 12:31 AM  

I luv read fanfiction @ fanfiction.net.hope u can bring a new one.this story is really good. :)


Blogger Liselle MonCherie SAID ON February 26, 2012 at 12:39 AM  

Hehe,I've heard of that before.
Thx for reading :).I'll keep working for new ideas


Blogger Unknown SAID ON February 26, 2012 at 3:48 AM  

after u da edit,print it out and bind the book with illustration.

and trust me when i say this, 10 years from now when u go back to ur earlier works,u cannot help but smiling all the time reading 'em.

hehe :D


Blogger Unknown SAID ON February 26, 2012 at 11:40 AM  

goood one:D


btw, suka bila masuk blog ni rasa mcm tgk crita kartun pun ada HAHA!cute:D


Blogger Crazy Dolphin SAID ON February 26, 2012 at 4:15 PM  

oh my,i have missed a lot.went to the the first and read every each part.

good story!

it will be even better with some editing here and there. :)

maybe you can try writing in wattpad! :D

Btw i think in one part you mistakenly wrote 'emily' instead of 'Laura'.do not remember which part.sorry :x

p/s i'm little dolphin


Blogger Liselle MonCherie SAID ON February 26, 2012 at 4:57 PM  

@Clive= I'm working on it,don't worry
XD

@Story= thx for dropping by

@H.s= yeah! thx for telling me! uhuhu
I found a really awesome editor to edit this story thx so much for reading :)


Blogger Dayang Deno SAID ON February 26, 2012 at 9:56 PM  

pheww.. finally.. nice ending! :):)

is there any story for me to read? now i'm so stressed.. final exam is coming.. arghh!!

p/s : please cont ur writing okey..^^


Blogger Liselle MonCherie SAID ON February 26, 2012 at 11:59 PM  

Sure,but have you read a funny story
that I wrote before? hehe


Blogger Lily SAID ON March 2, 2012 at 1:08 PM  

Tissue please!!! v.v,
Cudi can't accept the fact that Barry was dead... so do I D;
Haaaiz... please don't be a fool or stupid just because of love! But mistake is okay...
"Barry! Save me! I want to commit a suicide now,hurry before I jump!" <--- man!!! -sheds tears-
Liselle, good work. If Roger do exist, he must be proud of you. So proud of you ( ;


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